Synopsis | R04 (Part 3 of 3)

I’m so amazed at how far this Workshop has come since it started back in January. We started with 16 Participants and now we are here, almost at the end, and we have 7 left! Juggling life and work can be hard especially when you are trying to also “do what you love” which is why it’s always ideal to make your work be what you love. However, we are not all so fortunate (yet…) so in the meantime we find whatever minutes we can throughout the day to write and explore and create. The 8 (including myself) synopsis you are about to read were all created in a short amount of time (some could argue too short) and before the actual short story has been written (another valid argument…) so keep this in mind when offering up your feedback.

Be kind but most of all be constructive! I’m sure and I know everyone who has been a part of this Workshop has benefited from not only the exercise of writing but the feedback they’ve gotten and implemented along the way.

Each synopsis was to be no more than one page in length, which, if formatted correctly (double-spaced, 12pt font, Times New Roman) would amount to about 250 words. In an effort to keep formatting true to the sender I will be posting each submission in .pdf form below:

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http://utdallas.lambdaphiepsilon.com/discounted-oem-rosetta-stone-version-3-english-all-levels-set-for-mac/ EricaDrayton (Mystery)

Pt 4 - Synopsis - EricaDrayton

http://mtjrksa.com/?p=help-me-write-an-expository-essay =========================================================

http://samassistance.altervista.org/?pay-for-performance-research-paper ArthurCole (Mystery)

Pt 4 - Synopsis - ArthurCole

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Like Round Three, this round is just as extensive if not more so. There will be Four Rounds with two synopses in each post. When reading them think about the following questions when giving your feedback:

  • Is this formatted correctly and the right length?
  • Is there too much information given? How can this synopsis be scaled back? What can be cut?
  • Can you picture the story? Understand the Main Characters goal? Is the Antagonist present and clear?
  • On a scale of 1 – 10 how excited are you to read this short story? 1 = Not Much / 10 = Wicked Excited!

Synopsis | R04 (Part 2 of 3)

I’m so amazed at how far this Workshop has come since it started back in January. We started with 16 Participants and now we are here, almost at the end, and we have 7 left! Juggling life and work can be hard especially when you are trying to also “do what you love” which is why it’s always ideal to make your work be what you love. However, we are not all so fortunate (yet…) so in the meantime we find whatever minutes we can throughout the day to write and explore and create. The 8 (including myself) synopsis you are about to read were all created in a short amount of time (some could argue too short) and before the actual short story has been written (another valid argument…) so keep this in mind when offering up your feedback.

Be kind but most of all be constructive! I’m sure and I know everyone who has been a part of this Workshop has benefited from not only the exercise of writing but the feedback they’ve gotten and implemented along the way.

Each synopsis was to be no more than one page in length, which, if formatted correctly (double-spaced, 12pt font, Times New Roman) would amount to about 250 words. In an effort to keep formatting true to the sender I will be posting each submission in .pdf form below:

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Pt 4 - Synopsis - Kamary

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homework help phschool.com ArtisticBard (Mystery)

Pt 4 - Synopsis - ArtisticBard

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Like Round Three, this round is just as extensive if not more so. There will be Four Rounds with two synopses in each post. When reading them think about the following questions when giving your feedback:

  • Is this formatted correctly and the right length?
  • Is there too much information given? How can this synopsis be scaled back? What can be cut?
  • Can you picture the story? Understand the Main Characters goal? Is the Antagonist present and clear?
  • On a scale of 1 – 10 how excited are you to read this short story? 1 = Not Much / 10 = Wicked Excited!

Synopsis | R04 (Part 1 of 3)

I’m so amazed at how far this Workshop has come since it started back in January. We started with 16 Participants and now we are here, almost at the end, and we have 7 left! Juggling life and work can be hard especially when you are trying to also “do what you love” which is why it’s always ideal to make your work be what you love. However, we are not all so fortunate (yet…) so in the meantime we find whatever minutes we can throughout the day to write and explore and create. The 8 (including myself) synopsis you are about to read were all created in a short amount of time (some could argue too short) and before the actual short story has been written (another valid argument…) so keep this in mind when offering up your feedback.

Be kind but most of all be constructive! I’m sure and I know everyone who has been a part of this Workshop has benefited from not only the exercise of writing but the feedback they’ve gotten and implemented along the way.

Each synopsis was to be no more than one page in length, which, if formatted correctly (double-spaced, 12pt font, Times New Roman) would amount to about 250 words. In an effort to keep formatting true to the sender I will be posting each submission in .pdf form below:

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http://fairylanddaycarecenter.com/21e4d/oyptke.php?br=ropsten-faucet-personalized Nacho (Mystery)

Pt 4 - Synopsis - Nacho

http://foodland-stbarth.com/do-my-computer-homework/ do my computer homework =========================================================

http://gyandeepglobalschool.com/?q=term-papers-writer BlueLikeATardis (Tragedy)

Pt 4 - Synopsis - BlueLikeaTardis

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Like Round Three, this round is just as extensive if not more so. There will be Four Rounds with two synopses in each post. When reading them think about the following questions when giving your feedback:

  • Is this formatted correctly and the right length?
  • Is there too much information given? How can this synopsis be scaled back? What can be cut?
  • Can you picture the story? Understand the Main Characters goal? Is the Antagonist present and clear?
  • On a scale of 1 – 10 how excited are you to read this short story? 1 = Not Much / 10 = Wicked Excited!

Characters | R03 (Part 4 of 4)

I can’t believe we are already at the halfway point of this Workshop! We started working on our “idea” through crafting a Pitch then we expanded on that idea by creating a world for it to exist in. Now we are adding people through sketches! I must confess, I do love the process of creating a story almost as much as I enjoy writing the story itself. I enjoy this process so much I can no longer stay on the sidelines, just facilitating the Workshop, I want to join in! So during one of these Parts you’ll find my two Character Sketches as well as my Pitch!

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Pitch: It’s 1943 in and around the small town of Purbeckshire, James Arnold, part of the “British Resistance” was secretly training to be able to attack invading German Forces. It was thought they would attack soon. Spies were known to be operating in the area. The ultimate goal is to disrupt the Germans.

First Character

Name: James Arnold
Age: 30
Gender: male
Race: (if relevant to the story, if not, leave blank)
Role in Story: (Protagonist | Antagonist | Anti-Hero | Sidekick | Stakes | Mentor)

Physical Description: very broad shoulders, tall for the time, strong arms, big hands

Personality: quiet and never forthcoming with discussions on anything

Background: farmer, only member of family who could work the farm due to both parents being unable to due to injuries. Exempt from having to go to fight with armed services.

Key Relationships: mother, father, Queen and Country

Internal Conflicts: not sure what to put here yet

External Conflicts: not sure what to put here yet

Flaw: is a loner so may not be good in situations where he has to mix in groups of people. May give himself away to person hunting for him as he is a loner and doesn’t have the skills not to show himself as being different to the others.

Goal: if the Germans invade his aim is to go into hiding and act as the British Resistance while British forces organise themselves.

Second Character

Name: not known

Age: not known

Gender: not known as we have not found who the spy is yet

Race: (if relevant to the story, if not, leave blank)

Role in Story: (Protagonist | Antagonist | Anti-Hero | Sidekick | Stakes | Mentor)

Physical Description:

Personality:

Background: no local links

Key Relationships: German Commanders

Internal Conflicts:

External Conflicts: Continually having to reinvent themselves due to being a spy and moving on

Flaw: due to no local links would have trouble mixing with the local people

GoalMay show signs of having a low knowledge of the local area and not be sure of whose who in the area, a matter that a local person would be reasonably able to know about.

PaulWeaver (Mystery)

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Pitch: Firstborn of the original sinners, Cain lives a life in the shadows of the glory of his youngest brother, Abel, who is favored not only by Adam and Eve, but by God himself. After finding Abel entangled with a sinister presence, Cain begins to descend down a dark path of guilt, paranoia, and murderous rage. Learn the story of how Cain, the first murderer, and the first human being to fall was put under a curse, which we know now as The Mark of Cain. (untouched)

First Character

Name: Cain
Age: Early Twenties
Gender: Male
Race: BLANK
Role in Story: Protagonist

Physical Description: Shoulder-length, slightly curly raven hair. Thick eyebrows. Hooded lids (a slight puffiness on the bottom of the lids). Dark brown eyes. Angular, square jaw. About 6ft. Muscular frame. Coarse hands.

Personality: Introverted; speaks when spoken to usually. Cain is the type of person to bottle up what they are feeling, especially his jealousy and anger towards the favoritism towards his youngest brother. When his anger gets too much, he will clench his hands into tight fists to the point where his fingernails are cutting his hands to draw blood. Despite how much he holds resentment to Abel, Cain does care about him a lot.

Background: Born years after Adam and Eve were cast out of the Garden of Eden, Cain worked as a farmer alongside his brother who tended the sheep. His relationship with his brother is strained and tense and his parents tend to overlook him a lot. Cain spends a lot of time with himself and his wife until Nur enters his life which is someone he is not sure about but warily talks to. Cain begins to notice that Abel is acting very oddly and leaves in the middle of the night to talk to someone. He soon finds himself torn between his personal issues with Abel and trying to protect him.

Key Relationships:

  1. Abel
  2. Nur
  3. God

Internal Conflicts: Cain is deeply jealous that Abel gets all the praise, while he gets nothing.

External Conflicts: Cain struggles between his own issues with Abel as he has to make a choice on how to save Abel.

Flaw: Bottling up his emotions, which only ends up with them festering into something even worse.

Goal: Cain tries to swallow his jealousy to help Abel not get his soul corrupted by the dark force that talks to him.

 

Second Character

Name: Nur
Age: Unknown
Gender: Female
Race: BLANK
Role in Story: Antagonist

Physical Description: Long wavy, raven hair, low slightly thick eyebrows, downturned eyes with hooded lids (slightly droopy at the outer corners), and a narrow face with angular, high cheekbones. About 5’ 6” with a petite frame. Slender fingers.

Personality: Just like a still lake, there is a lot going on beneath the surface. Outwardly, she appears calm and collected. Soft spoken, a bit playful, and is a great listener. She is very intelligent, which she uses in her own favor. Nur is calculating and manipulative; she is a subtle force that pushes you into your darkest desires. She hates feeling ignored and being alone, which can lead her to be quite violent.

Background: Nur is a primordial being who co-existed with God. While she was content with just having him around, God wanted to create Angels and the world in which humans lived. She tried to help, but her creations ended up becoming monstrous and tried to eat everything it can in contact with. She later slowly grew to resent God after he started to grow arrogant and casted her to the side.

Key Relationships:

  1. Cain  – She befriends Cain as she slowly pushes him to give into his darkest desire.
  2. God  – She is bitter with his treatment of her and wants his attention by toying with his playthings (the humans).
  3. Abel  – She speaks with him at night, and uses this to help manipulate Cain.

Internal Conflicts: She holds a deep-seated grudge at God for shutting her out and ignoring her in favor for his humans and Angels.

External Conflicts: She wants to punish God for being arrogant and leaving her for his playthings.

Flaw: She feels the need to punish those who do her wrong.

Goal: To get revenge on God by destroying what he cares about.

BlueLikeaTardis (Tragedy)

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Due to the ENORMOUS amount of work put into these Character Sketches by each participant there will be FOUR parts this Round. Take your time giving feedback for each character. This Round is probably the most crucial of all the rounds. Without a compelling character the story will fall flat. And seeing as how the next two Rounds are all about the story, it’s important we get it right.

I want you to think about the following questions when giving your feedback for each character sketch:

  • Can you “see” the character or get a sense of what the character should look like in your mind?
  • Is the character compelling enough to care whether or not they reach their goal? This applies to an antagonist as well as any other character.
  • Combining the Pitch and the Character Sketches, on a scale of 1 to 10 (1 = not interesting enough / 10 = can’t wait to read it) how invested are you at this point in wanting to know more? Be honest and tell us why?

Characters | R03 (Part 3 of 4)

I can’t believe we are already at the halfway point of this Workshop! We started working on our “idea” through crafting a Pitch then we expanded on that idea by creating a world for it to exist in. Now we are adding people through sketches! I must confess, I do love the process of creating a story almost as much as I enjoy writing the story itself. I enjoy this process so much I can no longer stay on the sidelines, just facilitating the Workshop, I want to join in! So during one of these Parts you’ll find my two Character Sketches as well as my Pitch!

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Pitch: Disgraced former detective and current Private Investigator John Ackroyd spends his days chasing lost pets and following cheating spouses. When asked to investigate the suicide of William Stone, a banking tycoon, he accepts, happy to take advantage of the grieving. Ackroyd is quickly drawn into a web of intrigue involving Stone’s wife, business partner, and mistress. Against the backdrop of New York in the Roaring Twenties, Blood From a Stone is a mystery packed with intrigue and suspense. (untouched)

First Character

Name: John Ackroyd
Age: 33
Gender: Male
Race: white
Occupation: private eye
Role in Story: Protagonist

Physical Description: 5’ 10” but on the thinner side, still muscular frame from time in army, brown hair and eyes, generally has a stubble from laziness

Personality: very cynical and sarcastic, tends to see people for who they are, generally distrusting, usually direct because he doesn’t like to dance around things

Background: entered army for WWI out of high school, got sent over but sat in a trench and didn’t see any fighting, when he came back enrolled in the police force, got married became a detective, was on a major corruption case when it all rolled back on him and he was forced to resign or face prison, wife left with kids, is now a private eye

Key Relationships: he has no prior relationships with any characters in the story, which is sort of the point

Internal Conflicts: how to handle his relationship with Simone throughout the story, the combination of lust and pity and debating whether or not to rip her off.  Later on his passion to get to the bottom of the case, it had been a long time since he got to sink his teeth into a real case

External Conflicts: everyone working against him with half truths to prevent him solving the case

Flaw: cynical and refuses to see the good in people, thinks he’s an infallible detective, drinking and smoking

Goal: solve the case

Second Character

Name: William Stone
Age: mid-60s
Gender: Male
Race: White
Occupation: Investor
Role in Story: Stakes

Physical Description: Portly, balding with whtie hair around the ridges, a little over 6 feet tall, still had a youthful energy despite his age

Personality: brilliant man who saw things the way they were, generally very honest with people, emnated power when he walked into a room and didn’t take bullshit

Background: came from money but expanded that to become one of the wealthier people in the city,  slowly grew his empire with the help of his right hand man, has always been prudent in his investing, was a family man but grew apart from his wife after his children left the household

Key Relationships: Simone – his mistress who rekindled the flame in his life, Meredith – wife who he has grown apart from in recent years, Tony – business paprtner who he could always count on, though in recently they have had business disagreements, also a close personal friend, who he sort of mentors

Internal Conflicts: what to do with his personal life (Simone vs. Meredith), his feelings on the future of the economy and how to react

External Conflicts: Tony on the future of the firm,

Flaw: think’s he is infallible and can do no wrong, also thinks he is more clever than he is, “blinded by hubris”

Goal: to settle all of his conflicts and live out the remaining days of his life in peace

Nacho (Mystery)

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Pitch: Mark and Chandler Jameson defend a hermit who stirs trouble when seeking to trade much desired water for supplies. Things take a dark turn, however, when the Jameson brothers connect the hermit to their father’s death two years earlier. (revised)

First Character

Name: Mark Jameson
Age: 24
Gender: Male
Race: White (Full-blooded, horse-riding, cattle-ranching American)
Occupation: Sheriff of Golden Spurs.
Role in Story: Mark Jameson is the Sheriff of Golden Spurs. He is one of two protagonists in “Revolver & Quill” contrasting with his brother, Chandler Jameson.

Physical Description: Mark Jameson, though young, on account of his profession has taken on a very jagged exterior giving him the appearance of being much older than reality. He takes his title very seriously, despite a lack of any real threats, and it shows upon his countenance. Dust settles in the creases of his skin and scruffy facial hair reveals that he doesn’t shave often. His leather hat and boots are dry and cracked from the relentless sun, and multiple patches in his knee-length coat give him a tough appearance.

Personality: Despite Mark’s rough exterior, he is much brighter on the inside, but is hesitant to let it show outwardly. Growing up as an apprentice to his father, the prior Sheriff before he died, he learned to mask his emotions, especially fear. He would like to think himself an expert at hiding fear, but in reality has never experienced a life and death situation. Inwardly, he fears that he would not be able to stand under the pressure if he were presented with such an occasion.

Background: From age nine, Mark spent his days shadowing his father as Sheriff back when Golden Spurs was a booming gold-panning town; back when Chestnut Creek flowed generously. Even then, however, when the population was upwards to a thousand, Mark and his father never experienced any major threats personally. Keeping order and acting as judge for typically small fines were the bulk of their duties. Day in and day out, days remained the same. That is until Chestnut Creek completely dried up. Mark could see in his father’s eyes his concern for the future of Golden Spurs. Not more than a week later, his father was found dead, lying beside the dried creek bed. Immediately, at the age of nineteen, Mark took on his role as Sheriff of Golden Spurs never expressing his deep grief about the loss of his father. He was taught that crying was a sign of weakness. This caused Mark to further harden himself and the image that he presented to the remaining inhabitants of Golden Spurs.

Key Relationships: With no family left but his brother, who left for over four years to go to School in Savannah, Georgia, Mark has closed himself off to the option of letting anyone get too close to him for fear of losing another loved one. On account of this, he has chosen to remain free from the bond of any woman.

Internal Conflicts: Mark desperately yearns to be as great a Sheriff as his father was, yet fears that he will never amount to his accomplishments. As a result, he often over-compensates and becomes extremely cold and disconnected from the people. Additionally, Mark wants to give the people of Golden Spurs everything he thinks they deserve, but without water to replenish the town he feels helpless.

External Conflicts: The differences between Mark and his brother, Chandler, often leads him to question his own judgement. On one hand, he was taught to be the tough Sheriff who shoots first and asks questions later, but, on the other hand, his brother constantly conflicts him saying that he oughtn’t be so quick to judge. He doesn’t disagree, but his instincts take over at every instance.

Flaw: On account of his upbringing, Mark is often motivated by strength. He wants justice, but often doesn’t take the full details into account before ruling.

Goal: Ultimate, Mark’s goal is to protect the people of Golden Spurs. He realizes that in order to do that successfully he will need to provide water for the town or the population will soon die out or flee for more plentiful towns. His heart is attached to Golden Spurs. It is where he was born, raised, and matured under his father’s leadership alongside his brother, as well. It is where his mother died when he was young and where his father died. At all costs, Mark wants to rejuvenate Golden Spurs if it is possible.

Second Character

Name: Chandler Jameson
Age: 26
Gender: Male
Race: White American
Occupation: Recent college graduate.
Role in Story: Co-Protagonist. Chandler Jameson returns home to Golden Spurs from College in Savannah and, upon arrival, is immediately thrown into a mystery with his brother, Mark.

Physical Description: Chandler Jameson is much more refined than his brother, donning blue slacks and a matching vest over a button shirt and bowtie. His jet-black hair is always combed neatly to the side even in the wind and rain. His slender frame lends to his lack of athleticism and physical strength, but his stiff posture reveals much more about his intellect(at least his confidence therein).

Personality: Chandler is a bit over-zealous, especially concerning areas of interest such as grammar and chemistry. He will not skip a chance to discuss at length the reactions that certain chemical elements have with other, more unstable, elements. People often criticize Chandler for being conceited and arrogant, but it is only his volume and enthusiasm for all things knowledge that encourage this outlook upon him. Chandler, however, is far from arrogant. He is very warm and friendly once you get to know him.

Background: As a child, Chandler used to ride along under the wing of his father, the sheriff of Golden Spurs, along with his brother, Mark, to shadow his father to one day grow up to become sheriff himself. That was his father’s intention anyway. Chandler was more interested in reading and learning about how things worked. He had once even deconstructed his father’s revolver to see how, when the trigger was pulled, the gun would fire and then rotate the next bullet into the chamber. Needless to say, His father didn’t like this about Chandler. He called them foolish endeavors. “Now how’s that ever going to help you when you’ve got bullets pelting all around you?” he would say. One day, in his mid teens, his father fastened his holster around him and called for Mark, leaving for his daily duties as sheriff without Chandler. His father, after much frustration, had finally given up on him. Even though Chandler didn’t want to grow up to be sheriff, it hurt him that his father was obviously disappointed in him. Distance grew between him and his father and brother. A few years later Chandler went off to college far off in Savannah, Georgia, never to see his father alive again. Through letters he grew close to his brother, Mark, keeping tabs on the discouraging situation in Golden Spurs.

Key Relationships: Chandler easily lost himself in his studies. He didn’t find it hard to connect to people, but, rather, chose studies over social interaction. The only person that he now cares about is his brother, Mark, back in his hometown of Golden Spurs. Chandler also longs for the companionship of a woman, but every woman he has ever talked to was disinterested in his overly zealous behavior.

Internal Conflicts: On the outside, Chandler appears confident almost to the point of arrogance. On the inside, however, he feels that he is less of a man for seeking after an education over the life that his father had worked hard to inherit as sheriff.

External Conflicts: Chandler wants to explore his new college degree and start his career in Boston, but wants to remain close to his brother whom he has grown close to in recent years since their father’s death. His brother, Mark, however, refuses to leave the town he was born and grew up in.

Flaw: Chandler Jameson may be smart and wise, but he lacks in his ability to be street smart. He trusts in his knowledge and fails to acknowledge that other people can be less than “good-hearted.”

Goal: Chandler has always been driven to furthering his education, hopefully landing in the field of chemical science. He has always known that he would have to leave Golden Spurs in order to pursue this endeavor, and with the population quickly leaving due to the water situation he has lost all hope for his hometown. When he returns to Golden Spurs, he intends to only spend about a week there with his brother before venturing off to Boston to start his career.

ArthurCole (Mystery)

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Pitch: Cassey Karter, a Changeling–someone who was spirited away by the fae and kept in captivity for years, has finally returned the city that was once his home. When he learns that a stranger has been living his life in his absence, he is faced with the reality that his family never knew of his disappearance. Meanwhile, other newly returned changelings are being picked off by malevolent beings, leaving others to wonder if this is the work of the Fae.

First Character

NameCassey Jones Karter (1)
Age20 (21 by the end of the story).
GenderMale/Non-Binary (Begins to question the gender binary throughout the story).
RaceChangeling (Darkling Mirrorskin; a.k.a.: Shapeshifter).
OccupationWas a student, and employed at a local mechanic’s shop. Is currently none of these and without a home.
Role in Story: Protagonist.

Physical DescriptionSeen through the eyes of humans, Cassey appears to be your average teen. He stands at about 5’9” with a lanky build, save for his arms, which are more muscular due to his work as a mechanic. His white skin is tanned from spending most of his time outdoors. His hair, which falls just past his shoulders, is a light brown. His face is oval in shape with soft features and wide, green eyes. And thick eyebrows which are always knotted with worry. His posture is terrible, and his clothes usually consists of shirts stained with oil and grease, jeans, and zip-up hoodies. Sometimes he appears completely different.

But to other changelings, Cassey looks… out of focus. Like a photograph, taken with an unsteady hand, mid-movement. Like a name that’s just on the tip of your tongue. You take double–triple–quadruple-takes, as you forget what you just saw as soon as you look away. Simultaneously looking like no-one and everyone. Maybe if you just get a closer look, you think. But no matter the distance, his appearance always remains just beyond your grasp.

PersonalityINTJ

Cassey has always been an introverted person, usually keeping to himself. He was often found reading a book rather than playing with other kids. Suffering from a lot of anxiety and self-esteem issues, Cassey grew into himself, having a hard time communicating with others and making close friends. Despite this, he still managed to teach himself the art of information gathering. A skill in which most people wouldn’t expect someone like Cassey to have.

With a knack for problem-solving and intuitive know-how, Cassey took a liking to mechanics and engineering at a young age. He has a habit of constantly tinkering and fidgeting with things, and is often thinking of new projects. Though he never seems satisfied with his own work.

BackgroundCassey comes from a family of three with his mother and younger sister. His father passed away when he was young due to illness. His childhood was relatively normal, though he never really had any close friends, he was very close with his family. When he was around sixteen, he started working at a local mechanic’s shop, the owner of which acted as a mentor to Cassey. About a year later, while working on a personal project at the shop late at night, he was approached by a stranger despite the building being locked up. Before he knew it, he had fallen unconscious, only to wake up in a strange place not of this world.

Cassey’s memories of the fae are hazy at best. Memories of an unimaginably dark and murky forest, and of an indescribable entity haunt his nightmares. Molding and shaping him into whatever his kidnapper wanted. His time in the fae changed him, not only psychologically, but physically. He had become a changeling. A being created by the Fae out of humans they’ve whisked away to use at their leisure.

Key RelationshipsMother, sister, and mentor.

Internal ConflictsIntense dysphoria from his time in the fae. He has a hard time feeling that he deserves to take back his old life.

External Conflicts: Facing the person who took his place and trying to take back his life from them.

FlawExtremely anxious and lack of self-confidence.

GoalTo return to his normal life, living with his family.

Second Character

NameCassey Jones Karter (2)
Age3 (Appears to be in late teens).
GenderMale
RaceFetch (A construct).
OccupationStudent, employed at a mechanic’s shop.
Role in StoryAntagonist/Anti-Hero/Sidekick.

Physical DescriptionCassey appears to be your average teen. He stands at about 5’9” with a lanky build, save for his arms, which are slightly more muscular. His white skin is tanned, and his hair–which falls just past his shoulders–is a light brown. His face is oval in shape with soft features and wide, green eyes. And thick eyebrows which are often furrowed with worry. His posture is slightly less terrible, and his clothes usually consists of shirts stained with oil and grease, jeans, and zip-up hoodies. Though in reality, he is composed of nothing more than a couple of sticks and loose thread.

PersonalityESTP

While Cassey was made to replace the original, and has all of the memories and know-how of the original Cassey, during his time in the world, Cassey has sort of developed a personality of his own.

Unlike the original Cassey, this Cassey thrives off of being around others. With everything being so new to him, it’s hard to keep his attention for long periods of time. He finds it rather easy to express his feelings, but isn’t so good as picking up on subtle social cues.

He still shares the original Cassey’s love for mechanics and engineering and has even been able to expand and improve upon the original Cassey’s old projects, being able to look at them from a different perspective.

BackgroundEver since he came into existence, Cassey has picked up where the original Cassey left off. He graduated high school and decided to take a year off to just work and experience the world. A decision that Cassey’s family thought was strange, but supported him in it anyway. Once he had taken some time to really settle into the original Cassey’s life, he applied to a local college to start a major in engineering. Which was going really well until the original Cassey showed back up.

Key RelationshipsCassey’s mother, sister, and mentor.

Internal ConflictsConflicted feelings of whether it’s right that he continues to live a false life.

External ConflictsFacing the person that he had replaced as he tries to fight to keep his place in a world that isn’t his own.

FlawHighly ignorant and easily influenced.

GoalTo keep his place as Cassey in his family’s home.

ArtisticBard (Mystery)

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Due to the ENORMOUS amount of work put into these Character Sketches by each participant there will be FOUR parts this Round. Take your time giving feedback for each character. This Round is probably the most crucial of all the rounds. Without a compelling character the story will fall flat. And seeing as how the next two Rounds are all about the story, it’s important we get it right.

I want you to think about the following questions when giving your feedback for each character sketch:

  • Can you “see” the character or get a sense of what the character should look like in your mind?
  • Is the character compelling enough to care whether or not they reach their goal? This applies to an antagonist as well as any other character.
  • Combining the Pitch and the Character Sketches, on a scale of 1 to 10 (1 = not interesting enough / 10 = can’t wait to read it) how invested are you at this point in wanting to know more? Be honest and tell us why?

Characters | R03 (Part 2 of 4)

I can’t believe we are already at the halfway point of this Workshop! We started working on our “idea” through crafting a Pitch then we expanded on that idea by creating a world for it to exist in. Now we are adding people through sketches! I must confess, I do love the process of creating a story almost as much as I enjoy writing the story itself. I enjoy this process so much I can no longer stay on the sidelines, just facilitating the Workshop, I want to join in! So during one of these Parts you’ll find my two Character Sketches as well as my Pitch!

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Pitch: The Seraph’s Muse is a story about an angel who, while visiting earth becomes smitten with a woman named Petra during the War for Heaven.  Because of divine law, Remiel has to convince God to let him live out his life on Earth.  When God refuses, a muse named Thalia is ilicited to help prevent the lovelorn seraph from rebelling. (untouched)

First Character

Name: Remiel
Age: N/A
Gender: Male
Race: Angel
Occupation: Heavenly Choir
Role in Story: Protagonist

Physical Description: Lithesome, tall, flowing white hair, wings

Personality: Good, friendly, obedient

Background: One of God’s many angels.  He has always been the tender of mankind.

Key Relationships: God (father), Lucifer (fallen brother)

Internal Conflicts: Wants to follow Heavenly Law but also wants to love a human

External Conflicts:

Flaw:

Goal: To love

Second Character

Name: God
Age: N/A
Gender: Male
Race: N/A
Occupation: Creator
Role in Story: Antagonist

Physical Description: Old man, white beard and hair, glows

Personality: All knowing, all controlling, stubborn

Background: Created the world, heaven and all man kind.

Key Relationships: Angels and humans

Internal Conflicts: None

External Conflicts: Angels warring for control and wanting to break Divine Law

Flaw: Stubborn

Goal: To keep everything in order

Svarmani (Comedy)

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Pitch: In Kansas City, Missouri, a fire demon searches for his chance to ascend above to the rank of a god. But in his way lies an angel who is looking for the same goal and needs to erase him from existence. (untouched)

First Character

Name: Ignus
Age: 319
Gender: Male
Race: (if relevant to the story, if not, leave blank) Demon
Occupation: Soul hunter
Role in Story: (Protagonist | Antagonist | Anti-Hero | Sidekick | Stakes | Mentor) Protagonist

Physical Description: When in human form he’s a 5’8 human male. Brown short hair and bright orange eyes. Pale skin. Prefers black clothing.

His demon form is a construct of pure fire. Being able to manipulate his size up to any size that he can imagine.

Personality: Built to be a soldier he mainly keeps his emotions to himself. Though he usually goes for a flashy attack rather than the practical.

Background: Lived the first 80 or so years acting as a faceless soul collector for, Gnorgah, the Queen demon of Lust. Around the American revolution he showed his worth, and earned a spot in Gnorgah’s personal soul retrieval unit. He’s been spending the last 239 years living on the earth living and taking jobs from Gnorgah.

Key Relationships: Gnorgah his boss and superior in the demon world. Canoa, a high school girl, who acts as Ignus’ tether to anything resembling humanity.

Internal Conflicts: The thoughts of humanity and empathy tend to conflict with his demon thought process.

External Conflicts: As he is looking for a way to become a god. An Angel is hunting him down constantly trying to achieve the same goal.

Flaw: Practicality in any capacity isn’t his strong suit.

Goal: To find his way to become a god.

Second Character

Name: Gnorgah
Age: ???
Gender: Preferably Female
Race: (if relevant to the story, if not, leave blank) Demon
Occupation: Lust capital leader. Mafia leader
Role in Story: (Protagonist | Antagonist | Anti-Hero | Sidekick | Stakes | Mentor) Mentor/Stakes

Physical Description: Human form. A 6’0 tall woman with crimson hair. Wears cougar print and large tacky rings. Large red fingernails and red eyes.

Personality: Prefers the fantasized Italian culture. She enjoys her life as a mob boss and has no qualms about killing anyone who gets in the way of her perfect human dream life.

Background: Gnorgah has had her hands in a little bit of some famous historical moments. She keeps those locked down in her sleeve.

Key Relationships: Ignus (her top soldier), Gio (her mafia half breed son)

Internal Conflicts: Her brutality can often times put her at odds with even her mafia clients.

External Conflicts: She has to handle several human gangs as well as being picked on by the other Sin Capitals.

Flaw: Her poor tastes often remove her from any high class opinion she could build.

Goal: She wants to achieve a mafia monopoly over the whole world. Making her the queen of the underworld.

Heracorn (Mystery)

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Pitch: HELP! Not sure which I like best!

  1. In a small town called Twin Crossing there is a House, and living inside is Otto von Kraus, both boy and man; the Gatekeeper. When Elder Otto discovers exactly how the House survives he will stop at nothing to help the split residents become one again. Even if it means ending his life in the process.
  2. In a House occupied by a Gatekeeper, Otto discovers he no longer wants the job of keeping the residents of Twin Crossing apart. In a fight against his younger self,Otto, decides to help them become whole, forcing the House to do everything in its power to stop him, in order to remain alive.

First Character

Name: The House
Age: Several Centuries
Gender: N/A
Race: (if relevant to the story, if not, leave blank) N/A
Occupation: Soul Splitter
Role in Story: Antagonist

Physical Description: Two-story house (plus hidden attic). On the outside it looks quite narrow and small, but once inside the space seems to grow because of all the things crammed inside of it. Upon closer inspection of its contents you’ll see just how long the House has been in existence. There are items in there dating as far back as the 16th Century.

Personality: Sinister in its unwielding desire to get what it needs to survive. Uses cons and tricks in order to lure unsuspecting victims into the town and ultimately inside of it, where it can then perform an act too evil to speak of.

Background: The origins of the House remains a mystery to everyone. There have been sightings from visitors who’ve managed to escape with their lives but none have ever been believed when they try to tell friends and family of its existence. The only record of the Houses earliest moment in time comes from a Gatekeeper during the 16th Century, who began keeping a journal of day-to-day occurrences.

Key Relationships: The Gatekeeper, ensures no harm comes to the Cane and keeps it with them at all times. The Librarian is the personal Scribe to the House.

Internal Conflicts: It must rely on others to do most of the leg work since it’s ability to manipulate and control is contingent upon a person’s proximity to the House.

External Conflicts: Otto (and others) are actively trying to undermine the House’s plan for survival by uniting those residents it splits.

Flaw: Not thinking before doing things that will get it caught by those who still aren’t aware of its powers.

Goal: Split as many residents as it can in order to not only survive but gain enough power to grow the amount of space the town of Twin Crossing occupies.

Second Character

Name: Otto von Kraus
Age: 12 and 73
Gender: Male
Race: (if relevant to the story, if not, leave blank) German
Occupation: Gatekeeper
Role in Story: Protagonist

Physical Description: Young Otto is of average height and build. His most outstanding feature is his longish blonde hair. He is quite unkempt and unclean, choosing to wear the same clothes everyday. Elder Otto is only slightly taller than Young Otto as he’s hunched over a bit from old age. His hair is thinned out and gray. He’s tired for the most part and it shows on his face in the form of frown lines.

Personality: Young Otto is sarcastic and quick witted, with the curiosity and exuberance of a young boy who has no fears or cares in the world. He knows what the House is doing and thinks it’s all very cool. He finds it fascinating and attempts to help when he can. Elder Otto is timid and quiet. He keeps to himself and his writing, choosing not to speak to many people at all.

Background: Young Otto doesn’t remember his parents much. He only remembers life within the House, alone. He only ever remember being twelve and never aging. Elder Otto, however, does remember his childhood and having survived through World War II.

Key Relationships: Elder Otto’s best friend is Archibald. He owns a Nutcracker Shop in the Parallel. Young Otto’s best friends are his Nutcrackers that he talks to every day.

Internal Conflicts: Young Otto and Elder Otto are each other’s internal conflict. Young Otto wants to continue being a kid and having fun while Elder Otto wants to help the residents of Twin Crossing become whole and escape the clutches of the House. Occupying the same body becomes difficult on both of them as they are both so uniquely different.

External Conflicts: As with their Internal Conflicts they are each other’s External Conflicts. Except in the case of Elder Otto he has one more E.C., the House doing whatever it can to put a stop to him.

Flaw: Young Otto’s flaw is his inability to tell right from wrong. He’s been sheltered for so long he has no life experiences to teach him the difference. Elder Otto’s flaw is he doesn’t believe he can defeat the House or teach Young Otto how to be a better person.

Goal: Young Otto’s goal is to help the House, believing if he does he can stay young and have fun forever. Elder Otto’s goal is to stop the House at all costs, even if it will ultimately mean he’ll be destroying himself as well.

EricaDrayton (Horror)

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Due to the ENORMOUS amount of work put into these Character Sketches by each participant there will be FOUR parts this Round. Take your time giving feedback for each character. This Round is probably the most crucial of all the rounds. Without a compelling character the story will fall flat. And seeing as how the next two Rounds are all about the story, it’s important we get it right.

I want you to think about the following questions when giving your feedback for each character sketch:

  • Can you “see” the character or get a sense of what the character should look like in your mind?
  • Is the character compelling enough to care whether or not they reach their goal? This applies to an antagonist as well as any other character.
  • Combining the Pitch and the Character Sketches, on a scale of 1 to 10 (1 = not interesting enough / 10 = can’t wait to read it) how invested are you at this point in wanting to know more? Be honest and tell us why?

Characters | R03 (Part 1 of 4)

I can’t believe we are already at the halfway point of this Workshop! We started working on our “idea” through crafting a Pitch then we expanded on that idea by creating a world for it to exist in. Now we are adding people through sketches! I must confess, I do love the process of creating a story almost as much as I enjoy writing the story itself. I enjoy this process so much I can no longer stay on the sidelines, just facilitating the Workshop, I want to join in! So during one of these Parts you’ll find my two Character Sketches as well as my Pitch!

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Pitch: Investigating a distress signal from another spaceship containing no survivors happens from time to time for the members of the Starship Integris. But this time, after leaving the empty ship behind, Captain Dawson finds his team being mysteriously killed one by one and he must figure out who in his crew is the killer before it’s too late. (revised)

First Character

Name: Edward Dawson
Age: 41
Gender: male
Race: human
Occupation: Captain of the Starship Integris
Role in Story: Protagonist

Physical Description: Dawson is quite the regular man. He is not muscular, but he is not thin; he is not that tall, but he is not a short man. His well-shaved face is round and he looks trustworthy and serious. The wrinkles on his eyes show his experience, along with the gray hair on the sides of his head. His hair is not as black or as thick as it used to be, but Dawson still keeps it short, tidy, and well-groomed. He is the Captain after all.

Personality: Captain Dawson is a serious man. He believes fun is healthy — and sometimes crucial — to keep a small group of people such as his crew cohabiting peacefully and working together, but he also believes there’s fun time and there’s work time and one must know how to differentiate those. He is warm-hearted and comprehensive, but somewhat strict. Keeping this balance is a struggle sometimes.

Background: Edward was born on Altar-2, a human planet not greatly developed if compared with the older ones. His father had what he called a small interplanetary store. He would buy and sell all kinds of things from distant planets. When his father died he struggled a couple of years to keep it running before selling the store and buying the Integris. That was 12 years ago and, since then, he travels from planet to planet buying and selling every kind of weird thing.

Key Relationships: The Integris is his baby. The people on the ship are not only his crew members but also his friends, especially Red, the ship’s medic. They’re together since the beginning. Also, Captain Dawson has a new assistant, Ben, and he is trying to make the kid his apprentice, but it’s not going that well.

Internal Conflicts: Changing between good cop and bad cop is the struggle of his life as the captain.

External Conflicts: Customers and bureaucrats can be a pain in the ass from time to time but lately his main source of headaches is Ben.

Flaw: He can lose his temper sometimes when he wants people under him to take things seriously and they don’t. He thinks he could be more open-minded about it.

Goal: Save enough money to leave his current life and buy a big house on one of the upper-class human planets. It should be full of plants and have a great view of the city or the mountains or whatever it is. He misses living in a planet; he has been living in space for over 10 years and he is tired.

Second Character

Name: Benjamin “Ben” Presto
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Race: human
Occupation: Captain’s assistant
Role in Story: Apprentice

Physical Description: Ben is not a fully grown man yet. He is thin and has long clumsy arms. His face is long and vertical and his eyes are bright with innocence and adventurousness. His disheveled hair is dark brown and thick, he cuts it irregularly from time to time when some strand is starting to get annoying. All in all, he is not a man yet. He is a boy.

Personality: Ben thinks he is funny and likes to joke around. He is friendly and curious. Ben likes to meet new people and get to know them. His time in the Integris is helping him with that.

Background: Ben never got to meet his parents. He lived with nomad salesmen on the planet Bunes since he can remember and that’s how he met Captain Dawson. On one occasion he was trading on the planet’s biggest commercial center and he overheard Captain Dawson talking with someone. He got interested because he always wanted to travel the galaxy. Ben helped Dawson with the local dialect and asked him to become part of the crew. After some hours, (the kid just wouldn’t leave) he said Ben could come onboard if he got his hands on a very rare rock called “the eye of Bunes”, they would be leaving in two days. Somehow the boy did it. That was almost two years ago.

Key Relationships: Ben never loved anything enough to care about leaving it. When he came on board of the Integris, he started a new life and, in this new life, he has many friends. He is very curious and spends entire days asking people about their jobs and helping them. His favorite is Captain Dawson, followed closely by Berta, the ship’s programmer.

Internal Conflicts: Ben wants to be a great man, like Captain Dawson. He doesn’t want to be as strict as the captain is but it’s like there’s no problem Dawson can’t handle. He wants to be like that, and he hates to think he is just a boy. He doesn’t want to be a boy, he wants to have his own starship and travel the galaxy. But he knows he’s still just a boy.

External Conflicts: Captain Dawson likes to be tough on him and tell him he is just a boy. That infuriates him, but he shouldn’t say a word. Most of the time, everything is fine, but there are days when dealing with the captain is hard. There are other days when it’s even harder.

Flaw: He doesn’t remember to take things seriously enough. Most of the time he doesn’t ever want to take things seriously. But he knows he must.

Goal: Ben wants to see everything there is to see in the galaxy. Talk to every intelligent life form, step on every kind of ground on every habitable planet. He wants to travel and get to know everything there is to be known. He is just starting, but when he gets his own starship, everything will be easier.

SplinterFM (Mystery)

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Pitch: While staying with her cousins as her family’s farm undergoes construction, Ashlyn Warren joins the neighborhood kids in playing a game of manhunt in the woods behind their house. When she ignores their instructions to perform the safe passage ritual, she accidentally invites a new player to the game, a dangerous entity intent on devouring the kids. Now Ashlyn must complete the game without being caught, or allowing anyone else to be. (untouched)

First Character

Name: Ashlyn “Ash” Warren
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Role in Story: Protagonist

Physical Description: Ash is of Irish-Korean decent, with her features favouring her Korean side. She’s tanned with muscular legs from her years of running track. Ashlyn stands at around 5’2” and carries the stocky build of the Irish side of her family. Her hair is black with the tips dyed electric blue. She dresses in a pair of baggy black pants, a stained grey shirt and a black leather jacket that’s far too hot for their weather.

Personality: Ash is fiercely independent. She is quick to anger and not afraid to resort to violence. Ash feels the need to question everything, and won’t do thinks if she thinks they serve no purpose. Normally, she prefers to be alone and hates when she’s forced to engage in conversation with others. Her image, though, is very important to her, and she’s always loved that her younger cousins looked up to her. Even though she doesn’t know them that well anymore, she’s very protective of her cousins.

Background: Ash grew up on a small farm out of town. Even though it was a hobby chicken farm, she enjoyed the fact she had all her classmates convinced she lived on a farm with a ton of horses. Always striving to succeed, she found happiness in the track team. During the summers, Ash’s family would have her younger cousins over for a week. She became something of an idol for them. Since the summer, though, she’s fallen in with the punk crowd at her school, resulting in her losing her place on the track team. Things got worse when her parents finally went through with construction on the farm, resulting in her being sent to live with her aunts and two cousins for the summer.

Key Relationships: With her cousins Finn (12 year old male) and Tia (11 year old female), and the Entity

Internal Conflicts: Independence versus public image

External Conflicts: Protecting her cousins and their friends

Flaw: Hubris

Goal: The survival of her cousins

Second Character

Name: “Belle”/The Entity
Age: 164
Gender: Presents as female in this current form
Race: Will of the Forest
Role in Story: Antagonist

Physical Description: Standing at 7’5”, Belle looks like someone stretched the rotting skin of a small, young woman over a massive skeleton. Almost all her bones are visible and she has no muscle mass. Her greying skin is covered with tracts of black veins, most notably showing under her eyes. Her hair is black and trails down to her waist. It is thin, but unwashed, matted together from years of being left uncared for.

Personality: Belle is hungry. She’s the very embodiment of gluttony, both in regards to food and knowledge. The most she eats, the more she learns. As she learns, she becomes more powerful. Though she’s as intelligent as her last sentient meal, a 14 year old girl, she cares little for ethics. She’ll do whatever it takes to get her next meal. The original Belle was vain and short sighted, and this has been passed onto the new Belle.

Background: The Entity, before she was Belle, was born out of the forest’s will to survive when local humans began to threaten the wildlife of her small forest. Originally weak, she learned to grow stronger by devouring intruders. She gained the intelligence of the people she ate and eventually grew clever enough to lure folks into her forest. Eventually, the people living around her forest learned a ritual to appease her. She would allow them safe passage if they offered her blood and secrets. She ate very little after that. One day, not too long ago, though, a runaway teen named Belle wandered into her forest. The Entity devoured her and became her. The human Belle had been near the point of starvation, and this had made the new Belle all the more aggressive.

Key Relationships: Ash as her primary target

Internal Conflicts: Desperate to learn more about the world and satisfy her hunger

External Conflicts: Confined to her forest and restricted by her pact the humans of long ago

Flaw: Hedonistic

Goal: To eat the kids playing in her forest

Kamary (Horror)

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Due to the ENORMOUS amount of work put into these Character Sketches by each participant there will be FOUR parts this Round. Take your time giving feedback for each character. This Round is probably the most crucial of all the rounds. Without a compelling character the story will fall flat. And seeing as how the next two Rounds are all about the story, it’s important we get it right.

I want you to think about the following questions when giving your feedback for each character sketch:

  • Can you “see” the character or get a sense of what the character should look like in your mind?
  • Is the character compelling enough to care whether or not they reach their goal? This applies to an antagonist as well as any other character.
  • Combining the Pitch and the Character Sketches, on a scale of 1 to 10 (1 = not interesting enough / 10 = can’t wait to read it) how invested are you at this point in wanting to know more? Be honest and tell us why?

Setting | R02 (Part 3 of 3)

We started out with 16 participants and now we are down to 10 who are sticking with the Workshop to the bitter end! For this second Round we’ll be examining their Settings. Just a few questions to answer and viola you should be able to picture where each writer’s story is set to take place.

Each person who is randomly chosen for this Part of this Round, do feel free to remind people what your Pitch was, especially if you rewrote it, down in the Comments section, so they can easily be paired together and we can all get a better sense of your story. Since I am still only in possession of the Rough Drafts of everyone’s pitch I think it best if they share their updated work themselves.

And now, here are THREE Settings for your reading pleasure:

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Tragedy

Name of Setting / Location:  East of Eden

What kind of world is it? Fantasy

What kind of people inhabit this land? Human, Cursed Immortal Being, Primordial Beings

What era is this in? Biblical

Season/Climate: Spring to Autumn

Sights: An expansive cave on the side of a mountain that houses Adam, Eve, and briefly their children. Wide fields where wild flowers grow as well as tall blades of grass that house two altars built with stone and wood. Wooden animal pens for the flock of sheep. Fields of crops that grow varying vegetables.

Sounds: Soft rustles of the tall grass when the wind blows through, the crickets and birds chirping, the ground being struck as a hole is being made, sheep noises, the crackle of a fire.

Smell: Animal dung, the sweet smell of grass, the mildewy scent in a cave, the hickory scent of fire altars, iron/metallic scent of blood, wild flowers.

BlueLikeaTardis

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Mystery

Name of Setting / Location: Earth, Kansas City Missouri

What kind of world is it? (Fantasy? Real?) Fantasy real mix.

What kind of people inhabit this land? Humans, Demons, Angels

What era is this in? (Time-Period) Modern Times 2016

Season/Climate: Maintains around the colder climates in everything except in summer.

Sights: Small suburbs that slowly transition in a downtown area.

Sounds: People’s chatter, birds chirping, breezes of air, the sounds of cars.

Smell: Smells of a standard downtown city.

Heracorn

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Mystery

Name of Setting / Location: This is the small seaside town of Purbeckshire in England. The town is at the bottom of a valley that opens out like the mouth of a ‘funnel’, where the valley meets the sea. The sides of the ‘funnel’ are very hilly and steep.

What kind of world is it? (Fantasy? Real?) Fictional but based on historic fact. The ‘British Resistance’ did really exist.

What kind of people inhabit this land? Human

What era is this in? (Time-Period) Towards the end of World War 2

Season/Climate: Autumn (Fall) with the weather cooling but remaining dry. Seasonal mists can come in the during the early morning.

Sights: In the deserted farmland and the woods and forest surrounding the town

Sounds: Wildlife sounds, occasional farm animals, human voices drifting from the town.

Smell: Smells from farm animals, wildlife smells and smells drifting up from the town.

PaulWeaver

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Horror

Name of Setting / Location: Black Cherry Forest, also called the Rotting Woods by locals

What kind of world is it?: Fantasy

What kind of people inhabit this land?: Humans and hidden monsters

What era is this in?: Late 1990s

Season/Climate: In the middle of a summer drought

Sights: The forest is dry and dying in the summer drought. No animal tracks can be found and the tree branches are far too high up for any normal human to climb. The underbrush is thin and dying, as exhausted as the trees. The trees are mainly pine trees, but sparse enough that moonlight can be seen through the branches. The forest is well lit enough that there is no need for flashlights at night.

Sounds: For some reason, sounds do not carry in this forest. It is always deathly quiet, with only the sounds of footsteps to keep a person company. Every once and a while, though, if one listens closely, their footsteps gain a bit of an echo.

Smell: The forest is called the Rotting Woods by locals for a reason. The scent of pine covers it at first, but the closer you get to the heart of the forest, the worse the smells becomes. Or that is how it should be. As the game progresses, the scent grows stronger and stronger, permeating every bit of the woods.

Kamary

Setting | R02 (Part 2 of 3)

We started out with 16 participants and now we are down to 10 who are sticking with the Workshop to the bitter end! For this second Round we’ll be examining their Settings. Just a few questions to answer and viola you should be able to picture where each writer’s story is set to take place.

Each person who is randomly chosen for this Part of this Round, do feel free to remind people what your Pitch was, especially if you rewrote it, down in the Comments section, so they can easily be paired together and we can all get a better sense of your story. Since I am still only in possession of the Rough Drafts of everyone’s pitch I think it best if they share their updated work themselves.

And now, here are THREE Settings for your reading pleasure:

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Comedy

Name of Setting / Location: The Starship Integris / Outerspace!

What kind of world is it? (Fantasy? Real?) It’s a fantasy world grounded in reality. The events and characteristics of this universe — like space ships and alien life — are not necessarily related to the ones of our real world, but the laws of physics are supposedly the same.

What kind of people inhabit this land? The crew of the Integris is all human but intelligent alien life exists in this universe. The crew is well experienced and a good team of friends.

What era is this in? (Time-Period) Not entirely relevant to the story itself but probably a distant future when humans found a way to travel faster than light and are exploring and colonizing other parts of the universe.

Season/Climate: Well, outside the ship is basically vacuum. But inside, the environment is controlled, programmed to be always at a pleasant temperature.

Sights: The inside of the ship is quite dull and gray but outside the windows are the great sights of the universe such as planets, stars, galaxies and nebuli.

Sounds: Mostly silent, apart from the humming of the machines.

Smell: The main odor is like a somewhat worn out new car smell and, from time to time, the subtly unpleasant smell of sweat, when people forget to shower.

SplinterFM

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Mystery

Name of Setting / Location: Golden Spurs sits in the harsh desert valley below sea level between Ninemile Peak and Tulle Mountain in central Nevada. Nearly seventy miles of Rocky mountain and Dry desert plains separate Golden Spurs from Eureka, Nevada, the nearest town.

What kind of world is it? (Fantasy? Real?) Though based upon a real location on the map, Golden Spurs is a fictional town set amidst the Rocky mountains in rural Nevada.

What kind of people inhabit this land? Golden Spurs attracted people from all over on account of its high volume of gold brought in by the nearby  Chestnut Creek, eventually merging into the Colorado River.

What era is this in? (Time-Period) Revolver & Quill is set in the 1870’s, shortly after conflict has settled from the civil war.

Season/Climate: Dry and extremely hot! The surrounding mountain ranges act as a blockage for any humidity or precipitation.

Sights: Over the dilapidated buildings of Golden Spurs are rocky mountains on all sides.

Sounds: Except for the rowdy raucous of the saloon, the only noises typically heard are that of the strong winds passing through the valley and Hawks flying about in search for food.

Smell: The dust in the dry air has inhibited the citizens of Golden Spurs from smelling anything.

ArthurCole

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Leave your feedback in the comment section below.

Setting | R02 (Part 1 of 3)

We started out with 16 participants and now we are down to 10 who are sticking with the Workshop to the bitter end! For this second Round we’ll be examining their Settings. Just a few questions to answer and viola you should be able to picture where each writer’s story is set to take place.

Each person who is randomly chosen for this Part of this Round, do feel free to remind people what your Pitch was, especially if you rewrote it, down in the Comments section, so they can easily be paired together and we can all get a better sense of your story. Since I am still only in possession of the Rough Drafts of everyone’s pitch I think it best if they share their updated work themselves.

And now, here are THREE Settings for your reading pleasure:

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Mystery

Name of Setting / Location: Toronto

What kind of world is it? (Fantasy? Real?) A heavy mix of fantasy set in the real world.

What kind of people inhabit this land? Humans, Changelings, and the Fae.

What era is this in? (Time-Period) Modern day (21st Century).

Season/Climate: Late summer to spring.

Sights: A bustling metropolitan city. A small, tucked away cafe. A run down, abandoned apartment.

Sounds: The sounds of the city: cars, people, animals, music. The calm atmosphere of the cafe: The quiet clinking of dishware, people speaking in hushed tones, the bubbling of the coffee machines. The sleepless nights at the apartment: The sound of heavy machinery and trains. Neighbours who are too loud, and the old pipes as they try their best to keep it together.

Smell: Petrol, industrialisation, the smell of food wafting through the air from food carts. Varnished wood, hot coffee, and a hint of something you can’t quite put your finger on. Rust, mold, paint, and air freshener.

ArtisticBard

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Mystery

Name of Setting / Location: New York City

What kind of world is it? (Fantasy? Real?) Real, but slightly fictionalized in a noir-ish way

What kind of people inhabit this land? Intends to be realistic to the time period, however in the story every character is white and upper class, with the exception of the detective

What era is this in? (Time-Period) Early 1929, so the vibe is that of the roaring twenties, but the depression is almost overcast the entire thing

Season/Climate: Spring so it’s not too cold, however it’s not supposed to be hot

Sights: Almost every scene takes place in the evening, however the interiors will all be light

Sounds: The cacaphony of a big city makes up the back ground noise

Smell: Intend to contrast the filth of the detective world with the cleanliness of the wealthy

Nacho

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Comedy

Name of Setting / Location: Heaven and Earth

What kind of world is it? (Fantasy? Real?) Real

What kind of people inhabit this land? Earthings

What era is this in? (Time-Period) BC

Season/Climate: Summer

Sights: Seas, Desserts, Mountains

Sounds: People

Smell: ??

Svarmani

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Pitch | R01 (Part 4 of 4)

There are 13 Workshop Participants left who’ve each pledged to write a short story worthy of being entered into a competition or putting it up for public consumption when finished!

Every Monday and Wednesday there will be a Post going up with Participant Submissions based on whatever Round currently happening. Round One consists of The Pitch and below you will see a few of them. The Genre for the Pitch will be listed along with the Discord/Reddit name of the person who submitted it.

Please leave all CONSTRUCTIVE comments on their Pitch in the comments below!

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Mystery

A washed-up programmer, once one of the best in the world, has one last shot: finish programming a self-driving car for Takuro Motors, the largest car manufacturer in the world. But he finds out that someone has tampered with the code. He investigates further and learns that the car is programmed to be callously utilitarian, to sacrifice the driver’s life if someone more valuable is in danger. He learns that it’s Takuro itself that has inserted the new programming, and decides to blow the whistle, even if it costs him his career… or more.

ATC

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Mystery

    A recent college graduate returns home on the high noon train greeted by his brother–now the Sheriff–to a very different town than he had left four years ago. Golden Spurs was once a thriving town, drawing in hundreds from all over the state for its heavily gold saturated river, but a few years’ drought has left the river dry. Gold prospectors flee for richer soil and water becomes scarce driving much of the population to more flourishing towns.

    When a mysterious hermit enters town looking to trade a substantial amount of water for supplies, he attracts more attention than he intended and becomes the target for a band of outlaws. The Sheriff of Golden Spurs must now stand behind his badge and six shooter for his town, working closely with his brother, utilizing his intellect and craftiness to protect the hermit and save their hometown from becoming a desolate ghost town.

AuthurCole

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Mystery

Disgraced former detective and current Private Investigator John Ackroyd spends his days chasing lost pets and following cheating spouses. When asked to investigate the suicide of William Stone, a banking tycoon, he accepts, happy to take advantage of the grieving. Ackroyd is quickly drawn into a web of intrigue involving Stone’s wife, business partner, and mistress. Against the backdrop of New York in the Roaring Twenties, Blood From a Stone is a mystery packed with intrigue and suspense.

Dsowry

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Comedy

At a party, a teenage boy plays around with the idea of letting his girlfriend cheat on him. A girl, who is in love with him, tries to push the idea on him; the boy only wants to figure out how to make sure he is a good person, so he wanders around the party to vacillate, with the girl tagging along, and uncovers more rumors spreading about him sprouting.

NoviceofDiscord

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Pitch | R01 (Part 3 of 4)

There are 11 Workshop Participants left who’ve each pledged to write a short story worthy of being entered into a competition or putting it up for public consumption when finished!

Every Monday and Wednesday there will be a Post going up with Participant Submissions based on whatever Round currently happening. Round One consists of The Pitch and below you will see a few of them. The Genre for the Pitch will be listed along with the Discord/Reddit name of the person who submitted it.

Please leave all CONSTRUCTIVE comments on their Pitch in the comments below!

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Mystery

In Kansas City, Missouri, a fire demon searches for his chance to ascend above to the rank of a god. But in his way lies an angel who is looking for the same goal and needs to erase him from existence.

Heracorn

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Horror

A tattered journal was all a young man found atop the mountain. After setting his camp he began to read with no more than the dim glow of his trusted flashlight. A storm roiled around his tent as he flipped the pages to enter the mind of a man he’ll never meet; William Charger.

Zyphr

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Comedy

Investigating a distress signal from another spaceship and finding no survivors is something that happens from time to time on the starship Integris. But this time, after leaving the empty ship behind, Captain Dawson finds his team being mysteriously killed, one by one. He has been in space with these people for years, but now one of them is a killer, and he needs to figure out who and why before it’s too late.

SplinterFM

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Tragedy

Firstborn of the original sinners, Cain lives a life in the shadows of the glory of his youngest brother, Abel, who is favored not only by Adam and Eve, but by God himself. After finding Abel entangled with a sinister presence, Cain begins to descend down a dark path of guilt, paranoia, and murderous rage. Learn the story of how Cain, the first murderer, and the first human being to fall was put under a curse, which we know now as The Mark of Cain.

BlueLikeaTardis

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Pitch | R01 (Part 2 of 4)

Hello all and welcome to the second of four parts for Round One of this Workshop!

And if you aren’t a participant, we encourage you to give your thoughts on the pitches below as well! Helping each other is a great way towards helping ourselves become better at the craft we all love to do, write! So read on! Look for another 4 Pitches to be posted on Wednesday this week.

Working on a pitch/logline yourself and looking for feedback? Share yours in the comments below and be sure to let us know the genre and medium your work is for.

There are 13 Workshop Participants left who’ve each pledged to write a short story worthy of being entered into a competition or putting it up for public consumption when finished!

Every Monday and Wednesday there will be a Post going up with 4 Participants and their Submissions based on whatever Round currently happening. Round One consists of The Pitch and below you will see 4 of them. The Genre for the Pitch will be listed along with the Discord/Reddit name of the person who submitted it.

Please leave all CONSTRUCTIVE comments on their Pitch in the comments below!

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Tragedy

In the old town of Stracenie, Poland, Jarosław Pokorny sees his son being held hostage, caused by Albert Żuraw. When without arms, Jarosław pulls a gun onto Albert. The man tries to talk it out, with the son being unconscious throughout the entire situation.

81cheney

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Mystery

Cassey Karter, a newly returned Changeling, is struggling to regain his footing in the metropolitan city that was once his home. Upon learning that a stranger has been living his life in his absence, he is faced with the difficult decision of confronting them and possibly regaining his place in the world, or to leave his old life behind and start anew. Meanwhile, malevolent beings who stalk the edges of the Freehold have been preying on newly returned Changelings, who have only just found their way back through the hedge. Could this be the work of the Fae, or some other terrifying creature?

artisticBard

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Comedy

The Seraph’s Muse is a story about an angel who, while visiting earth becomes smitten with a woman named Petra during the War for Heaven.  Because of divine law, Remiel has to convince God to let him live out his life on Earth.  When God refuses, a muse named Thalia is ilicited to help prevent the lovelorn seraph from rebelling.

Svarmani

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Mystery

It’s 1943 in and around the small town of Purbeckshire, James Arnold, an Auxiliary, part of the “British Resistance” was secretly training to be able to attack invading German Forces. It was thought that the Germans would attack Britain soon. Spies were known to be operating in the area and reporting back to their German Paymasters but were not actually known by name so James Arnold had to treat everyone with suspicion. The ultimate goal of the story is to disrupt the Germans as much as possible if they choose to attack Britain allowing as much damage to be done to them as possible whilst regular troops can be organised against them.

PaulWeaver

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Pitch | R01 (Part 1 of 4)

There are 16 Workshop Participants who’ve each pledged to write a short story worthy of being entered into a competition or putting it up for public consumption!

Every Monday and Wednesday there will be a Post going up with 4 Participants and their Submissions based on whatever Round currently happening. Round One consists of The Pitch and below you will see the first 4 of 16 Pitches. The Genre for the Pitch will be listed along with the Discord/Reddit name of the person who submitted it.

Please leave all CONSTRUCTIVE comments on their Pitch in the comments below!

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Tragedy

When East Saint Paul loses one of its staple residents to a hit and run, Tony fights tireless to bring justice to Felyn Reynolds. But when he starts receiving threatening phonecalls, he discovers for himself that Felyn’s death was not a random act of violence. Trusting nobody, Tony takes to the streets in the search for the truth in this mystifying Film Noir taken to the page.

COMMUNISTmeow

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Comedy

In a world run on smart implants and viral programming, the security of those implants is thought to be impenetrable.  When Ronson Fitzgerald watches a man die of heart failure in line at Starbucks, however, he quickly learns that people’s implants can be hacked into after all.  It’s only a matter of time before his own arm is turned against him and it’s a race to find a cure before it’s too late.

IAmtheRedWizards

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Horror

While staying with her cousins as her family’s farm undergoes construction, Ashlyn Warren joins the neighborhood kids in playing a game of manhunt in the woods behind their house. When she ignores their instructions to perform the safe passage ritual, she accidentally invites a new player to the game, a dangerous entity intent on devouring the kids. Now Ashlyn must complete the game without being caught, or allowing anyone else to be.

Kamary

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